As I continue on my Christmas short story reading, I came across this nine page read by Adrianne James. If there is one thing that Without You - A Christ Short Story has going for it, it would be the fact that it is definitely short. I wouldn't really classify this as a short story. It seems more like a chapter from a much larger book.
The two main characters, Logan and Serenity, clearly have a history together according to the thoughts of Logan. This tale is written from his perspective and it starts out with him on a plane flying home to her. It doesn't take long to find out that he is a military man through and through, and Serenity...well she is not cut out to be a military man's wife. Yet, Logan still thinks he is right no matter how Serenity feels. During his travel back to her, however, he meets a few people that slowly helps him to stop and really assess his situation.
I believe that there is more to this then what was shared. Nine pages is really too short to get all the necessary details needed to make a story complete, even a short story. I had to go back and reread this a few times due to details that were not consistent. I feel Ms. James needs to go back, do a rewrite, and add more pages to this one. Rating:
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